Saturday, 5 February 2011

Unit 4 - Story 1

My first idea of my story before it was changed by the help from my partner Dmitrij and supporter Jackie.


1st:

The inventor looking out of the window, wanting to sunbathe at the beach, but releases he has a deck chair in the cellar.



2nd:

The inventor looks for his deck chair the hard way because of the pile of boxes he has around his cellar before tripping over.



3rd:

The inventor realises he tripped over the deck chair and takes it to the beach which he soon was sunburnt as he forgot to bring his sun lotion.

4 comments:

Drunk Rabbit said...

This story could really look good. The only things is that the third part is a bit off. He finds the deck chair and goes to the beach. That sounds good. But the sunburn is a bit overkill. If he could just find the chair in some funny way after a stressed out search and then just enjoy the beach would be fine. Though i might be off myself here,i'd like to know Phil's opinion on this one.

Axil said...

Ah, okay. I may properly end it as tripping over the deck chair, knocking him unconscious. But, ending it when he is at the beach sounds good too. =3

Drunk Rabbit said...

Or when he looses conscious he starts dreaming about the beach?

Axil said...

Yeah, good idea Dmitrij. =3