My first idea of my story before it was changed by the help from my partner Dmitrij and supporter Jackie.
1st:
The inventor looking out of the window, wanting to sunbathe at the beach, but releases he has a deck chair in the cellar.
2nd:
The inventor looks for his deck chair the hard way because of the pile of boxes he has around his cellar before tripping over.
3rd:
The inventor realises he tripped over the deck chair and takes it to the beach which he soon was sunburnt as he forgot to bring his sun lotion.
4 comments:
This story could really look good. The only things is that the third part is a bit off. He finds the deck chair and goes to the beach. That sounds good. But the sunburn is a bit overkill. If he could just find the chair in some funny way after a stressed out search and then just enjoy the beach would be fine. Though i might be off myself here,i'd like to know Phil's opinion on this one.
Ah, okay. I may properly end it as tripping over the deck chair, knocking him unconscious. But, ending it when he is at the beach sounds good too. =3
Or when he looses conscious he starts dreaming about the beach?
Yeah, good idea Dmitrij. =3
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